Friday, December 13, 2019

WEP ENTRY DECEMBER '19 WRITING CHALLENGE




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                                 I HEART CHRISTINE

No footprints. How could that be? 
     Earlier, my sister and I had been walking the beach in Malibu. The breaking waves of the Pacific, the cresting sun over the hills, and the architectural array of beachfront homes were a blurred reality compared to our painful conversation. Her breast cancer had returned. “Why does God allow diseases and other bad things to happen to people?”
      I had no answer. Does anyone really? Me? I’ve always accepted that—what is, is, because somehow I came into this world with a “knowing". Oh, I didn’t have everything figured out when I was younger; awareness came to me bit by bit and sometimes through hard life-lessons. That morning though, I wasn't sure my prayers would be heard and I’d be given the answer to my sister’s question.
       We continued walking, discussing her treatment options. I searched for words to give her comfort and hope, and she confessed her doubts about our Christian upbringing. Was it even necessary to believe in Jesus anymore?
       Finally, our walk took us back to our shoes we had left neatly side-by-side. Before we reached down to get them, we were surprised by a big heart etched in the sand next to them. Inside the heart was written: John 3:16. We looked at each smiling as if we expected the other to fess up that they had done it, but that wouldn’t have made sense; we’d been with each other the whole time. We contemplated if someone could have heard our conversations and then sneaked over and made the heart with the bible verse in it while we were gone. Our husbands? A passerby? No. We were the only ones on the beach that early morning except for a few runners. But even if it had happened like that, it didn’t explain that there were no footprints in the sand. We walked around the heart analyzing if someone could have jumped to the spot then jumped back. But there weren’t any footprints for at least fifteen feet in all directions. Had the heart been there when we left our shoes? No. We were both clear on that.
       “Do you remember what John 3:16 says?” my sister asked.
       “I do. ‘For God so loved the world that he gave his only begotten son that whosoever believeth in Him shall not perish but have everlasting life.’”
       Neither of us knew what to say. This distinct message in the sand was an answer to her questions and an answer to my prayer.
       We returned to her house and our waiting husbands and told them what had happened. After their doubtful and joking comments, my sister and I let the subject drop. We didn’t want to hear anything negative; we needed to ponder more on the message given to us.
         Though there were no human footprints in the sand that day, we both knew someone in the spiritual realm had been there. At least that’s the only explanation we could come up with.
       My sister accepted this mysterious “message in the heart” that day and renewed her acceptance of Jesus. As she traveled the remainder of her destiny, she took comfort that whoever left her that message would be with her to guide her into her next reality. I have no doubt that it did. And I have no doubt I will see Christine again..



22 comments:

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Such a warm, eerily lovely story. Thanks for it. :-)

Jemi Fraser said...

Filled with all the feels!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Now that is a really special story! An angel left that message.

Elephant's Child said...

Beautiful.
Thank you.

L.G. Keltner said...

Thank you for taking part in WEP!

This story reminds us all that we don't have all the answers in life, but amazing things can come to us in the darkest of situations. Thank you for sharing this story with us!

Yolanda Renée said...

Sometimes the miracle comes later, just when we think the loss is too much to bear. A lovely story of hope and faith. Thank you.

Denise Covey said...

I'm a great believer in angels. And that's my explanation. And I love the way you've crafted this story to its eerie ending. So her sister moved onto her new reality, but she's safe.

Thanks for posting such a unique story for the final WEP challenge of the year. I hope we'll read more in 2020.

Happy holidays!

Denise

Pat Garcia said...

Hi,
This is a beautiful story of what celebrating Christmas is all about and I enjoyed it tremendously. Especially the ending. She didn't get healed physically but her faith was restored and she had confidence in the one who left her the verse of Scripture.

Have a Merry Christmas and a great crossover into 2020.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat G

Sonia said...

Faith is a powerful thing to help sail through. We don't have all the answers and may be that is why we must believe. I loved reading your piece.

Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost said...

A beautifully written story. I'm an agnostic, but I keep an open mind about the spiritual.

Tanya Miranda said...

Beautiful. I’m not particularly “religious”, but I have found peace in just understanding the messages of the Bible. The message in your story is lovely.

cleemckenzie said...

Messages come when we need them the most. When one sister was searching for words to comfort the other, that was the part that grabbed me. In my experience, there never seem to be the right words for this kind of situation.

Nilanjana Bose said...

A gift of faith and hope and love - just perfect for the season. Thank you for sharing it.

Roland Clarke said...

The 'blurred reality' opening is powerful, Leigh - and sad. As someone living with two diseases, I endorse that initial question as so many do. You tackle the struggle for
answers in an appropriate way at this season. The mysterious message reminds me of the poem Footsteps in the Sand: https://www.onlythebible.com/Poems/Footprints-in-the-Sand-Poem.html

Christopher Scott Author said...

An inspiring tale, about the mysterious nature of hope and intuition. Well done, and Happy Holidays.

Susan B.Rouchard said...

Dear Leigh. Thank you for your story. A message full of hope for those full of faith.
Happy holiday writing.

Dreaming said...

What a sweet story full of hope and spiritual acceptance.

Rebecca M. Douglass said...

A sweet and hopeful story.

Sally said...

Oh, that's lovely.

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Leigh - an excellent message for us ... at times we wonder - yet others will know. Thank you - loved the entry - Happy New Year - cheers Hilary

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